Writing Prompts

[Werra]

My thinking too. Guns are no joke and they're in trained, angry hands.

If we assume that a trained Mizol can sense minds at 100 meters, the result would be something like this.

[entity2636]

Remember, Deinar is the planet where parents can have disobedient kids put to death.

No, Deinar is the planet where parents don't give a flying f*ck about their children, the State does

[Zarya]

The chief problem is that it moves too fast, as for the Diral attacking the warriors, Nathan would be the first one who would try to stop them. He just felt the wrath of repeater firearms and he know what a single show musket can do, a gun firing multiple shots at the same time?

He won't allow the others to risk it.

First thing I see happen is a nasty situation with the remaining arianesin.

[Werra]

First thing I see happen is a nasty situation with the remaining arianesin.

There were 20 originally, right?

[Zarya]

yes, two of them pregnant a couple of nanapi ago.

[entity2636]

She also thinks of you as far too feminine to be attractive.

By the way, nice touch there, that would slip past unnoticed or be interpreted wrong by the casual reader, the Loroi having inverted views on what's masculine and feminine

[Zarya]

+1

[novius]

yes, two of them pregnant a couple of nanapi ago.

In addition, the official records in "Beacons" showed the diral as a total loss, as in, they fooled around a Soia ruin and got killed, all of them.

It could easily be that things escalated that far that it wouldn't have been possible for them to continue an ordinary career path and the Mizol offered them the choice of forming up a clandestine group under their aegis or being drummed back into civilian life.

So far, Nathan tried to avoid doing them (lasting) harm. It would be the Mizol who shot first, deliberately injuring a male even, on the command of Nelonial. Had she just opted to take the arianesin out of the picture, things would have gone more smoothly, but hurting him as good as nixed all remaining chances for a peaceful solution.

[Zarya]

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The Mizol team may need to seek refuge with the diral, that is *if* they survive through the night while under attack by the pack of animals

[Werra]

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The Mizol team may need to seek refuge with the diral, that is *if* they survive through the night while under attack by the pack of animals

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They're Loroi and have two Mizol. If we assume that a Mizol can sense from 200 meters away (Tempo can send up to two miles, in comparison), then surprise should never be a factor for such scraps between Loroi. Don't ask me how they allowed themselfes to be snuck upon the first time. The only one who should be able to surprise them would be Nathan and he can only realistically take like two Loroi with him.
Without surprise, the Loroi should be able to just get up on a tree somewhere. But my impression of Arianesin may be wrong.

It would be the Mizol who shot first

Problem is that even a basic hole trap has the potential to break a leg. Slapping somebodys face hard with a twig can also blind. Those traps might have been harmless in comparison, but they could have easily seriously injured anyone walking into them. The Mizol shot, surrounded by wild, dangerous animals after suffering a number of physical attacks. I can't see any court sentencing them for defending themselfes. Males aren't that rare.

[Zarya]

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Yes they can sense the animals, but will be handicapped by the night and by the traps if they decide to move. Staying where they are might be the better option but they will be stalked by a group of animals capable to coordinate attacks and exploiting sacrifices by individual animals from the pack (IMHO camping out in the woods without having thoroughly surveyed the forest beforehand was a terrible idea to begin with - the away team had weeks to prepare the excursion).

I think Natan is out of the picture, and the diral too while they’re bringing him into safety. They may need specialised care for him though.

The traps and attacks during the day were relatively benign, these were warnings against trespassing.
Just a matter of who has the oldest rights in the area. Sure, someone can claim that by force but usually a conflict ensues and in a warrior culture the diral’s aproach could be seen as a juvenile but also proportional response to an unwelcome incursion.

[Werra]

I pretty much agree with you. My gripe is with the way the Diral went about this. If they had told the Mizol to beat it or else as the Diral, things would be far less serious. In fact the Mizol came prepared to bribe the Diral in just such a case.

Now they made the Mizol believe there is a hostile tribe in the area...formerly safe enough to send kids into. They pretty much force the Mizol to keep trying or to come back with more firepower as they have constructed an active emergency in which elders would need to become active in.

As I said...teenagers.

[Zarya]

The visitors are in trouble too. Something wonderful and plausible should grow out of this

[orion1836]

Overall, great job across the board, Werra.

The smartest thing the diral could do is get the hell out of there while they still can. Demolish the cabins and try to remove as much evidence as possible and hope to evade the Mizol long enough for them to give up and go back to their actual mission.

Whether or not they'll *be* that smart is another thing.

As far as Duskcrown's directive, I could see Alex putting forward Stillstorm as a compromise option (with the acknowledgement that it would be a duty she'd delegate to her staff, unless it was a case where she wanted to become personally involved). After all, Stillstorm kind of took that role in the very beginning, at least when it came to countersigning requests. No one would question her decisions, and it would almost completely remove the chance that she'd put in a request of her own in the future - an outcome which Alex would surely appreciate.

Not to mention, the look on her face would be priceless.

As for Beryl and Fireblade, I'm sure he'd elect to spend time with them on his own volition.

[novius]

After all, they are teenagers. And they are placed in a situation which is akin to the one depicted in the novel "Lord Of The Flies", aggravated by the fact that they met up with an individual who is already more adept at a more savage lifestyle.

So decisions we may scoff at as civilized adults may seem to be reasonable in their juvenile minds.

They put the away team in a situation which is akin to what the US soldiers faced in 'Nam... They were sent here with (apparently) lacking intel and facing a relentless foe they can't detect (Nathanial's Lotai) but is able to harass them at every turn and only show up when they wish. Their modern equipment seemed to be of limited use so far, and their morale was already taking a turn for the worse.

Moving around proved to be hazardous, so their options for the night was either to camp and wait out - which is only a slightly better choice than trying to move at night - or call for exfil. And I pegged Nelonial too stubborn to go that route.

While they scored one victory with defending the camp, it will have some repercussions. Not necessarily by the diral, but by the dissent Nelonial's choice of action caused within the ranks, too.

I have a good idea how it goes from there...

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Both sides will retreat for now (after giving the Mizol good reason to), licking their wounds. Of course the Mizol will come back, much better prepared (likely full combat gear), but face a completely different picture.

[novius]

There, done.

Nathanial might have succeeded in giving the Mizol a good scare, with Poison Claw's help. But their reaction might be much different of what they would envision, of course.

EDIT: And yes, I intended for Poison Claw to make that grievous mistake on writing the note with Nathanial's blood,

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and possibly adding her own fingerprint in it,

for the Mizol to have another large piece of the puzzle.

All in all, it was a pyrrhic victory. They succeeded in putting the Fear of God into the away team, but they grossly underestimated the Mizol's determination, especially when they go back to their ship - with much more sophisticated equipment at their disposition - and have a good look on what they brought back with them...

[Werra]

Nice! Well done. Looks like things are picking up again in Frontiers. The Diral might have given the Mizol a very good reason to check under every stone and behind every tree for that strange man-thing now.

I hadn't planned to get involved in Frontiers for long. Don't worry about skipping me. I am curious what you guys do with the situation.

I've also thought of starting a third writing prompt. What do you guys think about one set on one of the three sister worlds, pre spaceflight. So no humans at all. Maybe Deinar iron age or Perrein cold steel and muskets. Would that be of interest?

[novius]

Why am I thinking "The Legend Of Tempest" right now? I'm pretty sure it was chronologically located in such a time period, or rather, at such a period of their development.

[GeoModder]

Monday will be a bad day for 'Beacons' fans...

You had better wrote nothing. No new pages on the main site yet.

[dragoongfa]

I have brought dishonor to my fanboyism, I will commit sudoku: