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About Bastal we also need a good reason for her to look into Soia-Liron artifacts. She is not only a diplomat.
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Perhaps a special project, looking into the almost defunct transport system that everyone else considered a dead end street, but that unexpectely yielded Natan as a 'gift'.

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Zarya wrote:About Bastal we also need a good reason for her to look into Soia-Liron artifacts. She is not only a diplomat.
It's a good plot hook for the story itself. Apart from every Soia ruin having its promise of new, wondrous technology anyone with a bid for power would surely be interested in? Could be, since the command structure could be even more convoluted with Mizol, that she'd be quite a latecomer to this mess. Though...
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Given that the structure of this ruin was already known from depictions, the idea of a transport system could be something the Loroi speculated on - after all, maintaining the vast Soia Empire just with ships and jumpdrives would be a logistic nightmare. And, of course the Loroi's secret wish was to find another telepathic species and maybe confirming or denying the existence of a template... So the idea that there could have been an open gate to reaches unknown might have been quite intriguing for her.

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Instead of a long, pre-planned scheme, this Nathan matter could also be a golden opportunity for the Mizol on which they seek to capitalize. Would give them a huge motivation of not calling in anybody else.
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It would also implicitly strengthen the Dirals position without the Diral realising.
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The group is being sent to a neighboring city state to retrieve a price breeding male. The male was lend to that city as part of a brokered deal and now needs to be transported back. Diplomacy is always tricky and the threat of betrayal and worries about agents from a third city will be a concern. Therefore the group springs Batz from prison so that she can pretend to be a civilian camp follower as not to raise suspicions as to why four instead of the agreed upon three warriors are being sent.

That'll be the basis for the plot I will set up.

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Werra wrote:Instead of a long, pre-planned scheme, this Nathan matter could also be a golden opportunity for the Mizol on which they seek to capitalize. Would give them a huge motivation of not calling in anybody else.
Since they never expected something or someone like Nathanial to show up, they must have had a prior reason to investigate. And Loroi are simply too practical and (sorry...) unimaginative for 'just because it's there'. And an unknown energy signature sort of equals to unknown technology, which is appealing to a society which more often than not relies on digging through old artifacts in itself.

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A reason to investigate is the indication of the transport function the structures once had.

Perhaps Loroi do not have an overly rich imagination, but they could still be be interested in researching long shot options for interplanetary travel, or anticipate on potential hostile incursions on the Sister Worlds via remnants of the mostly defunct Soia transport system.
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It would be a sleepy but still operational program consisting of the utterly frustrating and tedious monitoring of planetary surface areas known to be littered with ruins that - until recently - never lead nowhere, and was considered as the perfect end-of career type of activity for capable geezers close to retirement.

Indications of the bulk transport function might be marine fossil materials and remains of large water animals on places where they clearly weren’t native, such as on terraformed places like Mezan.

In one of the earlier NF fanfic contributions Poisoned Claw is familiar with the shape of the surface tiles of the ruin and she recognises it as half a dodecahedron net. There’s more about this shape - and about Penrose tiles - on this page. The cavity that Nathan fell in indicates that there’s also an underground structure to it.

As a symbol it might have meant the same to the Soia as the Transport for London roundel to visitors of that city :)

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Another reason to vigorously investigate Soia ruins, technology aside, is cultural.

Given the (incorrect) belief that the Loroi descend from the Soia, there'd be a heap of cultural gravitas towards investigating and excavating such ruins, reclaiming lost glory, etc. Granted, Nathan does shoot a universe sized hole in that ideology, which is yet another reason to keep him a secret.

On the Bastal front, I think we need to perhaps dive into the politics of the period to get a better feel for her motivations.

So, it's ~1779. Bastal is ~350 Years old, meaning she was born around the 1420's.

She was born barely 20 years after the Splinter Wars ended. She probably saw the tail-end of the first Mannadi war before the space-time instability separated the Sister Worlds. This was followed by the second and third Mannadi wars and subsequent occupation.

They are presently in the midst of the Seren sector expansion, and are due in 20 years for the Neridi succession war and for the Civil War where Provincial Governor Eighth Dawn will challenge and successfully take the throne from Swiftsure before recentralising the government.

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If I had to feel out the situation here, the Sister Worlds are confederated in a manner that allows each individual sector to manage their own affairs whilst being nominally one nation. Each of the sister worlds have provincial governors which in turn expand their territories.

The problem then arises when the expansion of these territories outpaces the size and scope of the inner territories. If the Seren sector outproduces, outguns, and outmans the central territories despite being more diffuse population wise, then that's a very unstable situation. Moreso because the decentralised nature of the provincial governors make them more like foreign nations / quasi-feudal lords than federated states, and moreso again if the locals, the commanders and the civilians are more loyal to their governor than to the imperial throne.

Now, while there probably are byzantine schemes to play off the various governors against one another such that nobody ever gains a clear advantage, all it would really take is for a certain caste, the Mizol, to begin backing someone who can see the current state of affairs as being inherently unstable and is willing to redress that situation with a minimum of bloodshed.

If Bastal sees that war in the next fifty years is going to be inevitable, then it ought to make sense for her to pursue a path whereby she'll support a plan that will ensure that any such war is as short and painless as possible. Triggering a small, quick and bloodless war to avoid a large, grinding meatgrinder is arguably the lesser of two evils. That can be viewed as either high tier patriotism or outright treason depending on who you are, so that's something one would entrust to someone they trusted absolutely, or had a lot to lose by being a blabbermouth.
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Thank you, very useful. Lot’s of things going on in the Loroi timeline.

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Not done with this entry but it already took me a few days to get this written down and I am still not done as the next and final part still needs cleaning.
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Alex will propose three distinct things:

1) The use of Maskirovka type tactics to fool the Umiak.

2) The quick retrofit of freighters into missile Q-ships to serve as bait and traps.

3) The adoption of an 'abandoned' Loroi gunboat design, cheap and easy to mass produced with existing parts throughout the sector; not really worth much in a fight alone but squadrons of them could be troublesome if fielded properly.
I will have the next part done tomorrow and I apologize for this taking so long.

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Can you help me understand why the side with the faster ships with the longer ranged firepower would need gunboats to maneuver and not fighters to defend against missiles? And what can a gunboat do that a Loroi destroyer couldn't do?

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I will dig into the meat of it tomorrow but here are some basic stuff:

A gunboat's primary mission won't be close point defense but it should serve as an adaptable, flexible and cheap weapon's platform:

1) Skirmishing duties, able to dart ahead and directly counter the barrage of torpedoes and the enemy gunboats before they are on final approach, this while still being robust and sturdy enough to not be swatted aside by a single missile or a light plasma PD.

2) Fast pursuit and harassment unit, gunboats should have with inertial dampeners which should allow them to sustain heavy acceleration for longer than a fighter would while also having a greater range. Allowing them to move into positions that fighters couldn't get to while still having more firepower depending on the duties.

3) Finisher unit, depending on the weapons loadout a gunboat could have a punch hard enough to cripple if not destroy a heavier warship. A gunboat with a load out of heavy kinetic missiles could dart out during a fleet clash while the Umiak charge through the Loroi lines, launching its warheads from close range

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In contrast, destroyers are usually more soft-shelled, agile and fitted with lighter weaponry, suitable for facing lighter ships like frigates, fighters or even as point defense against missiles. Their primary role would be an anti-fighter screen to counter the danger of a whole squad of fighters doing a wolf pack on a heavier vessel.

The Loroi Ship Classes page places the Warhammer class as the odd one out, as it is rated as a destroyer, but has an armor and defense screen commonly found in higher ship classes and is specifically geared to counter gunboats (and their raw firepower, without sacrificing agility overly much), where the Curved Knife class is more suitable against fighters and frigates.

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dragoongfa wrote:I will dig into the meat of it tomorrow but here are some basic stuff:

A gunboat's primary mission won't be close point defense but it should serve as an adaptable, flexible and cheap weapon's platform:

1) Skirmishing duties, able to dart ahead and directly counter the barrage of torpedoes and the enemy gunboats before they are on final approach, this while still being robust and sturdy enough to not be swatted aside by a single missile or a light plasma PD.

2) Fast pursuit and harassment unit, gunboats should have with inertial dampeners which should allow them to sustain heavy acceleration for longer than a fighter would while also having a greater range. Allowing them to move into positions that fighters couldn't get to while still having more firepower depending on the duties.

3) Finisher unit, depending on the weapons loadout a gunboat could have a punch hard enough to cripple if not destroy a heavier warship. A gunboat with a load out of heavy kinetic missiles could dart out during a fleet clash while the Umiak charge through the Loroi lines, launching its warheads from close range
In a nutshell.

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Sorry for the delay, I am not going to lie, got hooked into a game and lost track of time the last two days.

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As long as the game is worth it.

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How do you feel about going into the direction of inter-caste intrigue? That would mean the Dirals peaceful time camping in the woods is coming to an end soonish.

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I forgot - who is Sedel?

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orion1836 wrote:I forgot - who is Sedel?
Mizol Parat Sedel, spoken name Tempo :)

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That could be a bit early to consider. Nathanial and the diral haven't even decided (yet...) how they would go from there, and there'd be still a lot of training and catching up to do for him. Either this means still a lot of progress to write or to skip over (I do prefer write, though - show, not tell) between 'now' and 'him getting involved in inter-clan strife', or this would be stuff for a sequel where we pick up at the point where the former diral and Nathanial is well-established and sent on various missions.

Yet, that they'd get involved sooner or later, that's a given. After all, the Mizol did recognize the diral and him as a valuable asset, and it would be foolish not to use them as it is equally foolish to burn them out.
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In 'Beacons' you wrote:Then she seemed to deliberate something, playing with the fingers of her right with the hair on her shoulder. It didn't last long before she spoke again.
Interesting for Duskcrown to refer to Tempo, and displaying the same mannerism of playing with her hair than Tempo does (or did) - any relation perhaps? - Nope, just coincidence. Duskcrown herself admitted to know her 'only' in passing. Though, Loroi aren't known to be big on family relations further apart than mother and daughter.

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@Novius - Tempo's native to Perrein down to her bone marrow, not just a Perrein "citizen", so any relation would be near impossible.

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Many Loroi would play with their hair, as they do wear it long. Such a trait is too common to hint at a shared family background. Now if Tempo had the same hair colour as Duskcrown that would be something as Perreinids usually have dark hair.

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Oh, I don't mean to timeskip the Diral into the civil war. Just that the beginnings of the civil war affect them already. There might be other interest groups in play, for example.

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Werra wrote:Many Loroi would play with their hair, as they do wear it long. Such a trait is too common to hint at a shared family background. Now if Tempo had the same hair colour as Duskcrown that would be something as Perreinids usually have dark hair.
I know, I did redact my post, after all.

I think there is some posting with Duskcrown's character sheet somewhere, but I can't seem to find it anymore. Though, I might have been mistaken.

Perhaps we should open up another thread just for the purpose to collect all the character sheets, one posting per actual WP storyline...

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