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Does "Epilogue" mean that this fanfic is now finished? Honestly, it seems to be cut short instead, unless the leviathan and the other dream entity will be featured in the sequel. The fanfic is finished. I believe I warned that pacing would likely be a problem but I am sorry that I did not convey th...

Epilogue: Awake Everyone looks up expectantly as Tempo returns. “News about Nezel, I hope,” Fireblade sends, her exhaustion at how persistent the other loroi had been in speculations that might never be confirmed leaking past her shields. “Yes. I have word from Sunfury,” Tempo sends. “The defense fo...

Out of nowhere, an incredible plot twist! However, I doubt whether the police are properly equipped to handle this case. Beryl should call the Ghostbusters instead, or maybe an exorcist ? On second thought, contacting the Inquisition would be the best choice. No, not that one, the other one that ca...

I would say let people form theories to start off then provide your own notes at a later date. Just to let discussion flow and build up people's anticipation. Everyone interprets stories differently. Some readers who left comments on my stories interpreted it in ways I had not completely anticipate...

Chapter Nineteen: Dream - Part 3 After giving their statements separately, Captain Hamilton and both Admirals Valdivia approach the former captives as they mill around aimlessly. “Sirs?” Ellen asks. “Do not be alarmed, none of you are in trouble,” Mary says. “There will be a review to determine how ...

Surprised, but somehow I just suspected that Caitlyn was involved with Claude's demise. Equally surprised that she intensely desires Lynne. And dropping that 'blue dress' clue was well delivered. She's definitely onto Beryl. My theory is that Caitlyn is either a construct of Alex's subconscious/rep...

Chapter Nineteen: Dream - Part 2 Beryl arrives in the control room to find Caitlyn waiting. Caitlyn holds out a set of wrist restraints. “Sorry, my sweet Beryl. It would be best if I treat you like the others for now.” “What do you mean?” “I have already captured Ellen and Kaetlin. I am not going to...

He is, what, "pink alien menfolk"? Can you imagine something even less warrior-like? :lol: Presumably the Loroi view Loroi males as less warrior-like. I'd have to look - if I recall correctly, the Neridi have taken a lot of casualties (as most of the fighting is in their space) but I do not remembe...

Well, I'm not going to tell you how to write your fanfic, I'm just pointing out some things. Alex is actually just an "apprentice" at this point in his career, and in modern military circumstances, he would still be assisting some experienced crew member at best. Somehow, he managed to screw up eve...

Chapter Nineteen: Dream - Part 1 Beryl’s eyes spring open, revealing Caitlyn’s green eyes staring into hers from a foot away. “Caitlyn? What are you doing here in my bed?” Beryl asks. “My sweet Beryl,” Caitlyn’s voice coos. Beryl’s eyes widen as she realizes that the woman is speaking to her through...

Well, even though Alex is now a proper Captain, I still doubt whether Stillstorm will recognize him as a warrior. But this is dalid too, I guess... Maybe once he does something suitably warrior-like... though I suppose it raises the question of whether Stillstorm considers any non-Loroi warriors. M...

Chapter Eighteen: Awake - Part 5 Beryl walks down the aisle to stand before the dual podiums where Tempo and Sunfury wait for the ceremony to begin. Fireblade and Alex flank her, each holding a lit candle, with the other members of the Highland Seven making up the audience, along with Opal, Dream, a...

Touching is a very private matter for the Loroi since it enhances the bandwidth of the mental link by an order of magnitude. I guess it might be normal for friends or family to touch each other, but Alex is a male and Loroi do not have much contact between the sexes outside mating encounters. Or do...

Perhaps senses? Also, walking around the station, holding hands with a male, how lewd! Yeah, that should be senses. My original idea was that they were holding hands so they could sanzai each other without disturbing Starcry, then I decided that did not make sense (that there would be too much worr...

Chapter Eighteen: Awake - Part 4 Tempo returns from a meeting with Opal and Sunfury with a neutral expression, summoning them to the large table in the central area. She places her data pad on the table, bringing up a holographic projection of a system map. “Sunfury wants our input on what the farse...

I'm a bit confused about who is saying what in the first part of the new chapter. Is Alex worried about the 51st, is that Beryl's line, or are there more conversational partners? Also, that tracking device is a great idea to have Alex show himself to the other Loroi. The "Maybe it is just worry abo...

Chapter Eighteen: Awake - Part 3 As Dream leads them to the farseer, Beryl sense Alex’s apprehension. “I am sure you will do fine,” she says, squeezing his hand slightly. “I can’t help but feel like I am going to let everyone down,” he replies. “I realize I am being egotistical thinking everything i...

Chapter Eighteen: Awake - Part 2 “Good morning, Alex,” Beryl greets him as he emerges from his alcove in the morning. “Did you sleep well?” “Do not move,” Fireblade says as the comb pulls on Beryl’s hair. “Ouch,” Beryl sends and says aloud. “That was not that bad. And I did warn you that I was not v...

The way to hell is paved with good intentions, as they say. In this scenario, however, it may be quite literal, since even a single Umiak or Loroi division can send all of Humanity down there. Also, do they have detailed information about Seren, or was that conveniently omitted? A commitment to dem...

I actually lol'd at them running into Stillstorm, though I should have expected that. Interesting that this is an issue for Emberwing - I'll have to refresh my memory on that bit. Good that Emberwing finally picked up that Zarjow is basically a mizol, at least in his mindset. Though I'm sure she'll ...